இது இப்படித்தான் அது அப்படித்தான் - என
நேர்க்கோடாய் நெறி வெறியாய் சிலர் வாழ்க்கை....
சித்தன் போக்கு சிவன் போக்காய் சுழன்றடிக்கும்
ஊழிக்காற்றாய் காட்டுத் தீயாய் வேறு சில.....
வெளியே புலப்படும் சவால்கள் மிகச் சிலவே - மனிதருள்
தோன்றும் பிணக்கும் மனக்கசப்பும் மலையளவே......
பனிப் பாறையாய் ஒரு துருவம்.... பெருங்கடலாய் மற்றொன்று....
உயிர் வாழ கையகல நிலம் திண்ணம் - நடுவில் எங்கேனும்....
சுரேன்
This is a real good poem. I am impressed. I think, if you read this poem after a few days, other a punctuation here and there, you will not change a single word. Its all in a perfect fit. A suggestion, why don't you forward it to some magazines ? These days, you can send it by email without having to undergo the postal process. Good Luck.
ReplyDeleteAndha Kaiyahala Nilathai Kannmoodum Munnar Kandukollum Vazhi edhuvo? Amaidhi naadi alaiyum aadhmaakkalukku adhuvallavo aanandam!
ReplyDeleteMay it be to look inwards rather than to look around.
Nice dear. It made me to stop and think for more than 15 minutes.
Thanks to both the feedbacks. Should I say I am overwhelmed.....??
ReplyDeleteWell, even for accomplished poets, recognition factor pushes them to do improve their quality...I am just a novice in poem writing and it is almost impossible to express my gratitude for such genuine feedbacks ....!!
Lemme reserve expression of my gratitude and come back with lot of fire and power in my subsequent poems. God Bess // Suren
Wish my two spelling mistakes in my previous comments are ignored, pardoned....and the true meaning appreciated .......!!!
ReplyDelete("pushes them to improve", "God Bless")
you see, a poet's mind operates at the speed of light....and some times proof reading is required.....!!I admit I should not have been so casual and over-confident...All in the game.....)
Hi Suren,
ReplyDeleteHow are you? I am Ganesh. (Gave my Agandam Id to Lokesh for his RoughNote)
I somehow left following AGANDAM, feel ashamed for that.
Ok, let me come to the comment about your Kavidhai.
To me, this sounds as if it is coming from a man of hatred about this worldly people.
Why into such a shell suddenly . . . ?
Regards,
Ganesh P
Dear Ganesh
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comment (after quite a long time??)
Where did you find hatred in the poem....I am just showing ray of hope that with compromise it is possible to live among extremists....!!
Keep in touch // Suren